439 Writing Topic

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439 Writing Topic 4

• PASSIVE vs ACTIVE VOICE IN WRITING
• ST SEGMENT ANALYSIS for Lab Report 4

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Prefer Active Voice and Replace Weak Verbs

• Examples from Brogans text.
• WORDs grammar check will find passive voice
  sentences.

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Passive and Active Voice

• Passive voice is sometimes necessary, but active
  voice is preferred.
• Active voice requires an actor whoor
  thatperforms the action of the sentence.

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Identify Active or Passive

• The key was turned.
• He turned the key.
• The key was turned by the manager.

• Passive, actor unknown.
• Active, actor present AND taking action.
• Passive, actor present, but, not acting. NOTE
  actor appears at the end of the sentence.

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Simple Edit Activate the Verb

• The variable-speed motor is connects to the
  transmission through a magnetic clutch.

• The variable-speed motor is connected to the
  transmission through a magnetic clutch.
• Can the verb become active?

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More Simple Edits for Active Sentences

• Control is focused in the operations area.
  (occurs)
• The error signal is combined with the feedback
  signal. (combines)

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Complex Edit Put the Best Actor at the Start

• A magnetic clutch connects the variable-speed
  motor and the transmission.

• The variable-speed motor is connected to the
  transmission through a magnetic clutch.
• What does the connecting?

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Put the Actor Up Front

• The stress/strain curve is shown in Figure 17.
• What is the actor?

• The stress/strain curve is shown in Figure 17.
• Figure 17 shows the stress/strain curve.
• The stress/strain curve appears in Figure 17.

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One More Example

• The design establishes the reliability of a
  system.

• The reliability of a system is established by
  the design.

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Extract an Actor from an Introductory Phrase

• In Each picture shows the models.
• For Systems such as Fe-C call for finer
  control.
• By This process keeps the project manager
  informed.

• In each picture the models are shown.
• For systems such as Fe-C, finer control is
  called for.
• By this process the project manager is kept
  informed.

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Mixed Active and Passive Verbs? Activate the
Passive

• The electron microscope images show that two
  factors caused the failure .
• The purchase request specifies that the sample
  shall not deviate from the design.

• The electron microscope images show that the
  failure is caused by two factors.
• The purchase request specifies that the design
  shall not be deviated from in the sample.

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Replace Weak Verbs Be, Do, Make

• More of problems
• Table 2 is a list of error rates.
• This section is an explanation of how to adjust
  the output.
• This stress is in excess of the component
  strength.

• More of problems
• Table lists
• section explains .
• stress exceeds .
• Active sentences!

• More of problems
• Table 2 lists error rates.
• This section explains how to adjust the output.
• This stress exceeds the component strength.
• Active sentences!

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Inspect Make/Made Words

• With this device astronauts can change course in
  space.
• The leads on the wafer do not make contact the
  pins on the third layer.
• NEP was measured at zero bias.

• With this device astronauts can make course
  changes in space.
• The leads on the wafer do not make contact with
  the pins on the third layer.
• A measurement of NEP was made at zero bias.

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Do/Done

• Our staff has examined this alloy.
• The lead writer reviews for accuracy and logical
  order.
• The module is removed by loosening the screws
  and pulling on the module.

• Our staff has done examinations on this alloy.
• The lead writer does the review for accuracy and
  logical order.
• Removal of the module is done by loosening the
  screws and pulling on the module.

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Summary

• Whenever possible, use active instead of passive
  voice.
• Put the actor up front.
• Edit your text to minimize use of be/do/make
  constructions
  since Dr. B will check
  on this for last lab report.

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Signs of infarct or ischemia?
THE most common indicator of ischemia you will
see during exercise stress tests ST segment
depression
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HOW TO DETERMINE ST SEGMENTDEPRESSION (or
ELEVATION)

• Draw an accurate baseline across at least 3
  cycles
• Pick the J point (end of S, start of ST)
• Count 2 mm ( ____sec) to the right of J point,
  determine position of ST relative to baseline

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USE OF ECGS IN EXERCISE TESTING WHAT YOURE
MONITORING FOR

• Indications on resting ECG that exercise is not
  safe today. Sample contraindications acute MI,
  frequent PVCs, major ST or at rest
• Arrhythmias during exercise get recorded on
  rhythm strip if at all possible
• ST segment changes