DARE TO REVISE

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DARE TO REVISE

• Make Your Writing Easy to Read
• A Partial Overview of Chapter 15

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Remember These

• WIRMI(What I Really Mean Is)
• KISS (Keep It Simple Smartly)
• DARE (Delete, Add, Rearrange, Edit)

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Different Levels of Style
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Different Levels of Style
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Eliminate Businessese Jargon
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Use Active Verbs

• Active
• The customer received 500 widgets.
• I recommend this action.
• The state agencies will implement the program.

• Passive
• Five hundred widgets were received by the
  customer.
• This method is recommended by me.
• The program will be implemented by the state
  agencies.

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Change Passive to Active

• Active
• The plant manager approved the request.
• The committee will decide next month.
• You Send the customer a letter informing her
  about the change.

• Passive
• The request was approved by the ltplant manager.gt
• A decision will be made next month. No agent in
  sentence.
• A letter will be sent informing the customer of
  the change. No agent in the sentence

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Revise Nouns to Verbs

• Make an adjustment
• Make a payment
• Make a decision
• Reach a conclusion
• Take into consideration
• Make a referral
• Provide assistance

• Adjust
• Pay
• Decide
• Conclude
• Consider
• Refer
• Assist