Title: Composition, Prose, and Rhetoric: Examples of Strong Writing from MGT 360
1Composition, Prose, and RhetoricExamples of
Strong Writing from MGT 360
- Wayne Smith, Ph.D.
- Department of Management
- CSU Northridge
- ws_at_csun.edu
2Superior, Contemporary Writing
- Employ higher-order writing strategies
- Always elevate your writing (throughout this
class and beyond) - All of the following examples are from my
outstanding students - Technical Composition
- Introductory Sentences, Thesis Statements, Topic
sentences, Transition sentences, Contrasts,
Emphases, Transition words - Artful Prose
- Short Sentences, Noun Phrases, Verb Phrases,
Adjectives and Adverbs, Prepositions,
Conjunctions and Coordination, Dependent Clauses,
Sentence Openers and Inversion, Branching
Sentences, Appositives, Interrogatories,
Exclamatories, Imperatives, Parallelism, Cohesion - Sentence Variety Length, Types, Passive
constructions, Originality, Rhythm - Persuasive Rhetoric
- Linkages to Domain/Subject Matter, Linkages to
General Education - Quotes, Analogies, Metaphors, Similes,
Topic/Content order, Arguments - Figurative Language
3Exemplars Composition Introductory Sentences
- A startling statistic or an unusual fact
- Chuck E. Cheese isa corporation that provides
employment to much older people with limited
English. - A vivid example
- He routinely yells at his employees and
threatens to cut our hours if we dont work
harder. - A description or an image
- In my experience, a manager can change the
attitudes of many employees by having a certain
feature that they carry with them at all times.
This feature is always displayed on a managers
face and can be felt when a manager is motivating
the employees. - I have been working there for over a year, and I
must admit that I really love what I do. - A paradoxical statement
- Bill seemed to be aware that he didnt obtain
his position purely through merit, but he was not
an incompetent supervisor.
4Exemplars Composition Introductory Sentences
- A quotation or a bit of dialogue
- The phrase, the customer is always right is
highly used and expected by the customers. - A question
- What is a company with no policy?
- An analogy
- Working for a mother as a babysitter can be just
as challenging as being an employer working for a
manager with equal responsibilities of dealing
with customers as well as having precise time
management skills. - An anecdote
- Today, a friend and coworker of mine was let go
from my job. He was always an ideas person and I
was the one doing much of the executing.
5Exemplars Composition Thesis Statements
- It seems that throughout the three years that
Tariq has been working for TRUECar, he has not
developed himself and has not taken any
leadership role in his department. - Customer service is a problem faced by any
service industry and this issue is a priority for
restaurants because its a big part of the
restaurant experience for the customer. - A thesis statement generally appears in the
introductory or opening paragraph. - A thesis statement
- requires further proof or development (not a fact
or description), - is an answer to a question (not the question
itself), - is neither too broad (not specific enough) nor
too narrow (cant generalize), and - should be sharply focused (avoiding vague terms
or fuzzy meanings)
6Exemplars Composition
- Topic Sentences
- A management issue that I have to deal with is
how the schedule is handled. - Transition Sentences
- This is a missed opportunity both in sales and
customer service. - Contrasts
- Two of my co-founding partners lack of
leadership skills were the inability to listen
and reason, which is quite odd because the
partner I originally went into this project with
was smart, talented, and eager to work at the
early stage of the project but all that was a
façade. - However, they are doing so effectively but not
efficiently.
7Exemplars Composition
- For word emphasis, use italics, then, if
necessary, use bold, and then, if necessary, use
underline. For phrase emphasis, use an em-dash
() - Italics are also often used when introducing key
nouns, especially proper nouns. - For word or phrase de-emphasis, use parentheses
( and ). - Emphasis (all emphases are in the original)
- But as time went on, I couldnt help but notice
that this particular situation was just a matter
of starting off with a good first impression. - Leadership is the best work of management.
- I just dont knowreally knowhow to balance my
precious time at this job. - a proper career would allows for a certain
level of autonomy and trust from managements
side. - I think the store manager, Nikko, picked up on
that right away. - De-emphasis
- The managers assistant had to the take the
water (its not fresh at that point) to the
workroom to be dumped out. (de-emphasis in the
original)
8Exemplars Composition Transition words
- Similarity Relationship
- Furthermore, the manager did not provide any
benefits such as health insurance. (emphasis
added) - Difference Relationship
- I thought all the employees they had hired were
fashion designers and professionals. However, I
later found out they were nonqualified
individuals who where looking for jobs.
(emphasis added) - Temporal Relationship
- Ultimately, we were able to convince him to give
customers the sale price on sodas, without any of
the required limit (emphasis added)
9Exemplars Prose
- Short Sentences
- We are a small firm.
- The problem was never fully resolved.
- Noun Phrases
- This is where the burden fell on my shoulders.
(emphasis added) - Verb Phrases
- This not only allowed the business to get back
on track, but also began replenishing my trust in
him. (emphasis added) - Adjectives and Adverbs
- Service makes a good restaurant amazing.
- There is a restaurant. Its look externally is
neither fancy nor beautiless. - Prepositions
- Of all the experiences, one case came up to my
mind instantly.
10Exemplars Prose
- Conjunctions and Coordination
- The manager approved my idea, and now every week
I have the employees and their supervisor sign
their report. - Dependent Clauses
- I suggested changes that will help the students
as a whole and also included a way to advance the
skills of the other upcoming and continuing
tutors in the program. - My parents, who loved me dearly, wanted to
instill a strong work ethic in me when they
required me to get a job. - Sentence Openers and Inversion
- Yet through all of this, I never complained to
any coworker, manager, or any of the bosses.
11Exemplars Prose
- Left-Branching Sentences
- On the rare occasions that they do notify me,
they send an email saying a package in my name
has arrived. - As I returned to my desk thinking on how mad
this client sounded over the phone, I heard
screaming coming from the reception area. - Right-Branching Sentences
- Throughout my years as a Youth Advisor, the only
time that the staff would come together as a
whole was in the first fifteen minutes of work to
discuss any individual problems that we may have
faced the day prior with any of the kids that the
staff should know about. - Appositives (one noun phrase redefining another,
prior noun phrase) - I faced my most difficult organizational
challenge while working for the San Diego Scout
Shop, a retail store owned by the Boy Scouts of
America.
12Exemplars Prose
- Interrogatories
- For example, are safety measures taken
seriously? Are consequences given for unsafe
behavior? Are sanitary regulations kept
up-to-date? - Have you ever been given your supervisors
responsibilities? - Exclamatories
- I hate my manager!
- Imperatives
- The burden is now on me to motivate and
encourage my students to stay focused and to
strive harder than before in order to do better. - Parallelism
- Work tasks were monotonous unchallenging,
unrewarding, and unsatisfying. - Managers have many responsibilities, and that
includes organizing, motivating, coaching, and
staffing. - Cohesion
- After working there for another six months since
the changes, I resigned.
13Exemplars Sentence Variety Length
- Aim, in general, for sentences around 20 words.
But vary the sentence lengths. Think of 20 as a
mean, as it were, for the entire document. - Examples from the same student-professional on
the same document - Short-length sentences
- We are a small firm.
- Medium-length sentences
- On the rare occasions that they do notify me,
they send an email saying a package in my name
has arrived. - Long-length sentences
- Customer service is a problem faced by any
service industry and this issue is a priority for
restaurants because its a big part of the
restaurant experience for the customer.
14Exemplars Sentence Variety Types
- Vary the types of your sentences. Even a 1 ½
page essay will have a mix of all four main types
of sentences. - A simple sentence has one independent clause.
- A compound sentence consists of two or more
independent clauses. - A complex sentence contains one independent
clause and at least one dependent clause. - A compound-complex sentence has at least two
independent clauses and at least one dependent
clause.
15Exemplars Sentence Variety Passive
constructions
- In general, use active sentences. That is, write
sentences where the subject is the clear focus. - But dont be afraid the use a passive
construction for variety. - Also, sometimes it just sounds better and is more
pleasant. - Its particular helpful when discussing rules or
policies objectively. - Just like bold, italics, and underline, use
passive constructions sparingly. - Passive construction
- Employees are not permitted to be under the
influence or in possession of drugs or alcohol
during paid work hours.
16Exemplars Originality
- Some sentence construction, and by extension,
paragraph construction, is highly original. Such
sentences are memorable and distinctive. Such
sentences represent the best of the writers
thinking and expressiveness. When chosen well
and used appropriately, these sentences have
persuasive, lasting impact. - I walked into a cold, monotonous establishment.
I knew no one, and understood no one. It was
abuilding on a corner, weathered by the sun, and
time. It was my first day as interim General
Manager. I can still remember the icy cold air,
the blue-tinted ambience, and the smell of
grease. - my manager came back to the office after work
because she forgot her wallet and was surprised
to see me at my desk. She questioned why I had
not gone home, and out of frustration, I replied,
Well, there are only eight hours in a given
workday, and when I have to do both your job and
mine, those hours are simply not enough - For me this experience was very eye opening
because I learned thatmany people have no
business being managers.
17Exemplars Originality
- The cash register was more of a decorative
statement than a functional instrument. - It all ended in one fell, and foul, swoop.
(emphasis in the original)
18Exemplars Rhythm
- Some sentences are deliberately designed to flow
well that is, the sentence is conscientiously
rhythmic and effortlessly natural. Like deeply
original sentences, these sentences too have
persuasive, lasting impact. - Perhaps his planning was good, but his leading
wasnt effective. - After cleaning my apron and preparing my pens
for action, I am ready for another day of work at
a local restaurant.
19Exemplars Linkages to General Education (Basic
Skills)
- In general, individuals with college degrees work
on different issues than individuals without
college degrees. Applying key concepts and ideas
from fundamental courses matter deeply throughout
your personal and professional life. - Computing
- One potential way of transferring data is to
create an Excel template and go about the process
of manually inputting all customer data into the
system. However, a more productive compromise
would be scanning the data of current clients
into the computer and from that point forward
inputting all new client data into the computer. - English
- My main problem with the team was lack of taking
notes and then retaining the information for the
next day. - Math
- One day I made exactly 7.50 because I had one
client who came in for a 15 haircut. That
really frustrated and angered me because I was
already charging 20 for friends and family.
20Exemplars Linkages to General Education
(Subject Exploration)
- Again, individuals with college degrees work on
different issues than individuals without college
degrees. Applying concepts and ideas from all
breadth courses matter throughout your personal
and professional life. - Arts and Humanities
- Dealing with people is difficult, to say the
least. - Comparative Cultures
- Most problems are based on human beings or
employees themselves. Also, these problems are
different from countries and cultures because
every country has its own working habits and
behaviors. - Critical Reasoning
- Using statistics for soccer can be good
indicators of the areas of improvements. We can
have 240 passes and three shots on goal, but live
examples will encourage strategic applications of
techniques to get more shots on goal.
21Exemplars Linkages to General Education
(Subject Exploration)
- Again, individuals with college degrees work on
different issues than individuals without college
degrees. Applying concepts and ideas from all
breadth courses matter throughout your personal
and professional life. - Government
- Six bales with some of our larger, and more
expensive, antique rugs had been flagged by US
Customs in transit from Afghanistan they were
being held at the dock for inspections. - History
- The business has been running strong for over 25
years here in the United States. - Natural Science
- My first year at the afterschool program was
very rewarding. I was the coach of several teams
and leader of the science club. - Oral Communication
- A simple thank you can go a long way.
- Speaking in person definitely helped reduce the
miscommunication and we were finally on the same
page.
22Exemplars Linkages to Domain/Subject Matter
- Business students have successfully completed
lower-division core classes. Students are
incorporating these high-level concepts into
their writing. - Accounting
- When asked what I did to come up with the
numbers on the financial statements, I had no
answer. I had no explanation of how the numbers
got there because I really didnt understand what
I was doing. - Business Law
- Economics
- It was not until after hours were cut that it
was made clear to us why we were failing to make
sales management was modeling our locations
sales goals on the sales numbers for a location
in San Francisco. - I believe the overarching issue here is that the
owners sole concern was making as much money as
possible while keeping her labor costs to a
minimum. - Statistics
- On a normal weekend, our restaurant would
average about 7,000 dollars however, on that
specific night we made over 11,000 dollars.
23Exemplars Linkages to Domain/Subject Matter
- MGT 360 is the Principles of Management and
Organizational Behavior. Students, already,
have learned about planning, leading, organizing,
and controlling and are incorporating these
high-level concepts into their writing. - Planning
- Elements of planning are demonstrated when high
levels of management determine specific plans and
goals of the bank tellers. - Leading
- Elements of leading are seen when my manager
tells me day-to-day words of encouragement and
coaches me on how to improve my solutions pitch
to customers. - Organizing
- Organizing elements can be observed when my
manager organizes my work schedules and where I
am on the bank teller line directionally to
maximize my number of customer interactions. - Controlling
- Elements of controlling are seen when I am
evaluated on my performance to reach my solutions
goals at the each quarter end.
24Exemplars Linkages to Domain/Subject Matter
- Business students may have successfully completed
one or more upper-division core classes, other
than MGT 360. Students are incorporating these
high-level concepts into their writing. - Finance
- I receive creditwhen a banker successfully
enrolls a customer into online banking, opens
accounts, or upon approval of credit card, loan,
and lines of credit applications set up by a
banker. - Marketing
- Fast forward to two years later when my boss
broke the record of having 1,000 orders per day
on Amazon. - Operations
- Any store has sales problems at one point in
their business cycle and it is simply
inevitable. - In particular I recall my delivery job from 2013
at a small business called Night Owl Cookies
where I had a new method of making our deliveries
more efficient.
25Exemplars Rhetoric Quotes
- Quotes
- You cant teach an old dog new tricksUnknown
- All ye abandon hope who enter hereDante
- You cant create experience. You must undergo
it.Albert Camus - There will be moments where fate rarely calls
upon us during a moment of our choosingTransform
ers (movie) - The single biggest problem in communication is
the illusion that it has taken place.George
Bernard Shaw
26Exemplars Rhetoric Analogies
- Analogies (General)
- During my four years working at this coffee
house, I had to deal with my share of good and
bad. Customers wanted their free drink, and
management wanted their sales numbers. (emphasis
added) - As a business grows, the management team should
grow with it. (emphasis added) - Analogies (Linkages to movie clip shown in first
class) - Going to work every day became a chore if I knew
I would be working with her. However, I knew in
the back of my mind that the person that would
have to change would be me. Just like in the
clips the class instructor showed us in class,
the horse trainer stated that your life is
reflected into your horse, just like my
inappropriate behavior reflects back into my
team. (emphasis added)
27Exemplars Rhetoric
- Metaphors
- Working in a pizzeria is all the fun that would
be expected, but when the dough rises, so does
hell. (emphasis added) - Unfortunately, when it rains, it pours.
(emphasis added) - Similes
- there is a breakdown in communication between
personal goals and overall team goals. When you
walk into our bank branch, there is the open
area with the desks where the bankers sit, and
the windows where the tellers stand. Tellers are
separated by a bandit barrier to help ensure
safety. It seems like this barrier has taken a
more literal meaning. Everyone who works on the
other side of the bandit barrier is completely
separated from the open side. Oftentimes, it
feels like were two separate countries who have
become enemies at war. (emphasis added) - Working there felt like walking on eggshells.
(emphasis added) - Topic/Content order
- The current method of closing the books was to
use Quickbooks online beginning on the 25th day
of the month, but the new proposal was to begin
that process five days earlier the 20th of each
month. (order in the original)
28Exemplars Rhetoric Arguments
- Claim
- As a result, I felt harassed and discouraged for
most of my time with the company. - Reasoning
- In my situation, my value was not based on the
quality of my work, but on my failure to
socialize. - Evidence
- Subsequently, I began to experience a series of
negative consequences, such asfrequent quality
reviews, unprofessional emails, and threats to
terminate my employment due to vague reasons. - Warrant (Theory)
- In conclusion, management should always try to
lead by example and provide all necessary tools
for its employees to be successful. - Acknowledgement/Response (Counter-argument)
- Initially, I was appreciative and excited of the
invitations to socialize especially when they
were paid by the owner. - Qualifications (Limitations)
- Personally, I have had to opportunity to
experience both sides of the business, as both an
employee and part of the management staff.
29Exemplars Figurative Language
- There many different types of figures of
speech. These are employed to provided
additional emphasis for key ideas, concepts, or
images in a narrative. In business prose
figurative language can be helpful but only if
used sparingly. - Cliché
- The shoes you filled when Michael left were
huge. - Personification
- Hyperbole
- Symbolism
- Im confident in your ability to right the
ship. - Synecdoche
- Metonymy
30References
- Most of the categories for the Composition
section of this presentation were excerpted and
adapted from the following book - Hacker, D., and Sommers, N. (2011) A Writer's
Reference (7th ed.), Bedford/St. Martin's,
BostonMA. - A few of the categories for the Composition
section of this presentation were excerpted and
adapted from the following book - Garner, B. (2013) HBR Guide to Better Business
Writing, Harvard Business Review Press,
BostonMA. - The categories for the Prose section of this
presentation were excerpted and adapted from the
following book - Tufte, V. (2006), Artful Sentences, Graphics
Press, Connecticut. - The categories for the Argument section of this
presentation were excerpted and adapted from the
following book - Williams, J., and Colomb, G. (2007), The Craft of
Argument, 3rd ed., Pearson Education.