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Title: READ: We all face Barriers in our life. A barrier is an obstacle or problem that stops you from moving forward. The barrier can be physical; something you could see like a fence or wall. It can also be conceptual; something you can


1
  • READ We all face Barriers in our life. A barrier
    is an obstacle or problem that stops you from
    moving forward. The barrier can be physical
    something you could see like a fence or wall. It
    can also be conceptual something you cans see
    such as being afraid of something.
  • THINK Think of a barrier you have faced. How
    would you explain it to someone? Did you overcome
    it? If so, how? What values (see list) did you
    use to face your own barriers? How did using one
    or more of his values help you accomplish
    something?
  • Courage Teamwork Determination Persistence
  • Integrity Citizenship Justice Commitments
  • Excellence
  • WRITE Explain how you use any of the 9 traits to
    face your own barrier(s).

2
Find Key Words
  • READ We all face Barriers in our life. A barrier
    is an obstacle or problem that stops you from
    moving forward. The barrier can be physical
    something you could see like a fence or wall. It
    can also be conceptual something you cans see
    such as being afraid of something.
  • THINK Think of a barrier you have faced. How
    would you explain it to someone? Did you overcome
    it? If so, how? What values (see list) did you
    use to face your own barriers? How did using one
    or more of his values help you accomplish
    something?
  • Courage Teamwork Determination Persistence
  • Integrity Citizenship Justice Commitments
  • Excellence
  • WRITE Write an expository essay that explains
    how you used any of Jackie Robinsons 9 values to
    face your own barrier(s).

3
Lets list ideas
  • CONCEPTUAL PHYSICAL
  • stage fright a car accident/injury
  • fear of flying making a team
  • moving to a new school being bullied
  • fear of water (swimming) divorce
  • racial discrimination
  • death of someone close Im going to model this
    one.
  • divorce

4
Intro Remember, broad statement that connects to
the audience, to your controlling idea (Thesis)
  • A couple examples of my broad statements
  • There comes a time in everyones life when they
    have to face an obstacle that tries to keep them
    from moving forward.
  • Everyone is faced at one time or another with an
    obstacle/ hurdle/ hindrance/ complication/
    impediment/problem/difficulties/ that they have
    to overcome to move forward.

5
Put together a powerful thesis
  • I remember clearly the harsh reality of moving
    and having to start over, yet I was able to move
    forward and not only meet new friends, but keep
    my old ones as well.
  • For me, moving away and attending a new school
    was one of the most frustrating situation I ever
    went through however, I gathered the strength to
    take the first step and overcame the obstacles
    standing in my way of making new friends and
    keeping my old ones as well.

6
Paragraph 1 Your barrier
  • You will need to have the following in it
  • When did it happen?
  • What happened? Were you given bad news? Did you
    hurt yourself? Did you find out you had to give a
    speech?
  • What was/will be the result of this happening
    (your barrier).
  • How did it make you feel?
  • Why did it make you feel this way?

7
EXPLAIN Lay out your skeleton paragraph
  • I was excited to be entering my 8th grade year
    when I was given the devastating news I was
    moving. This meant I was also going to a new
    school and would have to start life over. It
    scared me because I thought I would not be able
    to make new friends or fit in (barrier). I was
    also worried I would never see my old friends
    (barrier). The thought of being in a new
    environment made me very nervous. However, I
    decided to face my barrier. Ill
    tell you why I was I dont like the
    way I said this so
    excited about 8th grade I want to
    elaborate and make it more
    scholarly

8
Personal - Layer out your skeleton
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (1st part of barrier). I was also
    worried I would never see my old friends (2nd
    part of barrier). However, I decided to face my
    barrier.
  • Let me explain why I was scared

9
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I was also worried I would never see my
    old friends (barrier). However, I decided to face
    my barrier.
  • Why do I get anxious?

10
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. I was also
    worried I would never see my old friends
    (barrier). However, I decided to face my barrier.
  • add extra details

11
EXPLAIN Lay out your skeleton
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. I was also
    worried I would never see my old friends
    (barrier). However, I decided to face my barrier.
  • Need a strong transition into next problem

12
EXPLAIN Lay out your skeleton
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. Unfortunately,
    meeting new friends was not the only problem I
    was facing I was also concerned I would never
    see my old friends again (2nd part of my
    barrier). However, I decided to face my barrier.
  • Why was it so difficult?

13
EXPLAIN Lay out your skeleton
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. Unfortunately,
    meeting new friends was not the only problem I
    was facing I was also concerned I would never
    see my old friends again (2nd part of my
    barrier). I have know my friends since our
    pre-school years, so this became the only life I
    knew. We all had a special bond creating a
    unique relationship. However, I decided to face
    my barrier.
  • add more details

14
EXPLAIN Lay out your skeleton
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. Unfortunately,
    meeting new friends was not the only problem I
    was facing I was also concerned I would never
    see my old friends again (2nd part of my
    barrier). I have know my friends since our
    pre-school years, so this became the only life I
    knew. We all had a special bond creating a
    unique relationship. I could not imagine a day
    going by no being able to see, talk, or continue
    to go through the experiences of growing up with
    them. We have so much history together growing
    up. All our firsts happened together. However,
    I decided to face my barrier.
  • Cant leave out I had a best friend too. Let me
    tell you in detail.

15
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. Unfortunately,
    meeting new friends was not the only problem I
    was facing I was also concerned I would never
    see my old friends again (2nd part of my
    barrier). I have know my friends since our
    pre-school years, so this became the only life I
    knew. We all had a special bond creating a
    unique relationship. I could not imagine a day
    going by no being able to see, talk, or continue
    to go through the experiences of growing up with
    them. We have so much history together growing
    up. All our firsts happened together. Even
    worse, I did not know how to handle leaving my
    best friend. We were like sisters, inseparable,
    two peas in a pod. She and I supported each
    other in everything we did she knew my deepest
    secrets as I did hers. Never a day went by that
    we werent together hanging out or doing
    something important like talking about boys or
    doing our nails. It is impossible for me to
    imagine life without her in it on a daily basis.
    However, I decided to face my fears.
  • add details

16
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I found out I was
    moving (introduce barrier). This was suppose to
    be my big year, top man on the totem pole. Now I
    was going to have to start my life all over at a
    new school, a different environment. It scared me
    because I thought I would not be able to make new
    friends or fit in (barrier). When it comes to
    meeting people, I am a bit shy and have
    difficulty opening up. I find myself become
    anxious when trying to start a conversation with
    people I do not know. I am surrounded by my
    existing friends who I feel comfortable with, so
    when someone new comes around, its easy to talk
    to them because I have the security of my
    friends. The thought of being in a new
    environment trying to open up to new people made
    me incredibly uneasy. I felt all alone with no
    one to support me. Unfortunately, meeting new
    friends was not the only problem I was facing I
    was also concerned I would never see my old
    friends again (2nd part of my barrier). I have
    know my friends since our pre-school years, so
    this became the only life I knew. We all had a
    special bond creating a unique relationship. I
    could not imagine a day going by no being able to
    see, talk, or continue to go through the
    experiences of growing up with them. We have so
    much history together growing up. All our
    firsts happened together. Even worse, I did not
    know how to handle leaving my best friend. We
    were like sisters, inseparable, two peas in a
    pod. She and I supported each other in
    everything we did she knew my deepest secrets as
    I did hers. Never a day went by that we werent
    together hanging out or doing something important
    like talking about boys or doing our nails. It is
    impossible for me to imagine life without her in
    it on a daily basis. More so, what would happen
    when I made new friends? Would she feel we arent
    best friends anymore? However, I decided to face
    my barrier.
  • You know Ms. Daniels never writes simple
    sentences like this, so lets elaborate this
    transition too.

17
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving (introduce main
    barrier). This was suppose to be my big year, top
    man on the totem pole. Now I was going to have to
    start my life all over at a new school, a
    different environment. It scared me because I
    thought I would not be able to make new friends
    or fit in (barrier). When it comes to meeting
    people, I am a bit shy and have difficulty
    opening up. I find myself become anxious when
    trying to start a conversation with people I do
    not know. I am surrounded by my existing friends
    who I feel comfortable with, so when someone new
    comes around, its easy to talk to them because I
    have the security of my friends. The thought of
    being in a new environment trying to open up to
    new people made me incredibly uneasy. I felt all
    alone with no one to support me. Unfortunately,
    meeting new friends was not the only problem I
    was facing I was also concerned I would never
    see my old friends again (2nd part of my
    barrier). I have know my friends since our
    pre-school years, so this became the only life I
    knew. We all had a special bond creating a
    unique relationship. I could not imagine a day
    going by no being able to see, talk, or continue
    to go through the experiences of growing up with
    them. We have so much history together growing
    up. All our firsts happened together. Even
    worse, I did not know how to handle leaving my
    best friend. We were like sisters, inseparable,
    two peas in a pod. She and I supported each
    other in everything we did she knew my deepest
    secrets as I did hers. Never a day went by that
    we werent together hanging out or doing
    something important like talking about boys or
    doing our nails. It is impossible for me to
    imagine life without her in it on a daily basis
    More so, what would happen when I made new
    friends? Would she feel we arent best friends
    anymore? However, I knew I could not change the
    inevitable, so I decided the only thing I can do
    is gather the courage and persistence necessary
    to overcome this obstacle on my own.
  • (Nice! Now see what it looks like all together)

18
  • PUT IT ALL TOGETHER
  • The worst news I ever received was the summer
    before my 8th grade year when I was given the
    devastating news I was moving. This was suppose
    to be my big year, top man on the totem pole. Now
    I was going to have to start my life all over at
    a new school, a different environment. It
    frightened me because I thought I would not be
    able to make new friends or fit in. When it comes
    to meeting people, I am a bit shy and have
    difficulty opening up. I find myself become
    anxious when trying to start a conversation with
    people I do not know. I am surrounded by my
    existing friends who I feel comfortable with, so
    when someone new comes around, its easy to talk
    to them because I have the security of my
    friends. The thought of being in a new
    environment trying to open up to new people made
    me incredibly uneasy. I felt all alone with no
    one to support me. Unfortunately, meeting new
    friends was not the only problem I was facing I
    was also concerned I would never see my old
    friends again. I have know my friends since our
    pre-school years, so this became the only life I
    knew. We all had a special bond creating a
    unique relationship. I could not imagine a day
    going by no being able to see, talk, or continue
    to go through the experiences of growing up with
    them. We have so much history together growing
    up. All our firsts happened together. Even
    worse, I did not know how to handle leaving my
    best friend. We were like sisters, inseparable,
    two peas in a pod. She and I supported each
    other in everything we did she knew my deepest
    secrets as I did hers. Never a day went by that
    we werent together hanging out or doing
    something important like talking about boys or
    doing our nails. It is impossible for me to
    imagine life without her in it on a daily basis.
    More so, what would happen when I made new
    friends? Would she feel we arent best friends
    anymore? However, I knew I could not change the
    inevitable, so I decided the only thing I can do
    is gather the courage and persistence necessary
    to overcome this obstacle on my own.

19
Explain how you overcame it
  • Write/list how I was able to find the courage to
    make new friendships.
  • I took the first step and introduced myself to
    people it was scary I was nervous
  • During lunch or free time in class
  • I took a risk and went up to them
  • It was not so scary after all
  • People accepted me
  • Because I had the courage and took a chance, I
    now have many new good friends

20
Add some meat (details/elaboration)
  • Meeting new friends did not seem so difficult
    after I found the courage to introduce myself to
    people. It was scary. I found they were happy to
    meet me and tried to make me feel welcome. I met
    even more friends in class. Because I had the
    courage and took a chance, I now have many new
    good friends.
  • Strong topic sentence
  • This is what I did

21
Add some meat (details/elaboration)
  • Meeting new friends did not seem so difficult
    after I found the courage to introduce myself to
    people. It took me a few days, but I finally took
    the first step. I decided that when I was at
    lunch or there was free time in class, I was
    going to make an effort try to strike up a
    conversation with the people sitting around me.
    It was scary. I found they were happy to meet me
    and tried to make me feel welcome. I met even
    more friends in class. Because I had the courage
    and took a chance, I now have many new good
    friends.
  • Explain why/elaborate on how it was
    scary

22
Add some meat (details/elaboration)
  • Meeting new friends did not seem so difficult
    after I found the courage to introduce myself to
    people. It took me a few days, but I finally took
    the first step. I decided that when I was at
    lunch or there was free time in class, I was
    going to make an effort try to strike up a
    conversation with the people sitting around me.
    The first time was the worst I was so nervous
    and filled with panic. I was afraid of refection,
    but I was determined to take the risk. I knew if
    I didnt, there was no chance of me making
    friends, and I would be alone and miserable. I
    found they were happy to meet me and tried to
    make me feel welcome. I met even more friends in
    class. Because I had the courage and took a
    chance, I now have many new good friends.
  • Let me tell you how I did it!

23
Add some meat (details/elaboration)
  • Meeting new friends did not seem so difficult
    after I found the courage to introduce myself to
    people. It took me a few days, but I finally took
    the first step. I decided that when I was at
    lunch or there was free time in class, I was
    going to make an effort try to strike up a
    conversation with the people sitting around me.
    The first time was the worst I was so nervous
    and filled with panic. I was afraid of refection,
    but I was determined to take the risk. I knew if
    I didnt, there was no chance of me making
    friends, and I would be alone and miserable. I
    approached a table of people I recognized from
    class. Hello, I said in a hesitant, nervous
    voice, are you okay if I sit here and eat with
    you? I waited for a response - my heart in my
    throat - not wanting to stand there for fear the
    response would destroy me. Then the magical words
    came back to me. Sure! Instead of them not
    accepting me and my not fitting in, I found they
    were happy to meet me, and their comfortable
    conversations to make me feel welcome. Because I
    had the courage and determination to take a
    chance and speak up, I now have many new good
    friends.
  • Lets add a little more detail

24
Add some meat (details/elaboration)
  • Meeting new friends did not seem so difficult
    after I found the courage to introduce myself to
    people. It took me a few days, but I finally took
    the first step. I decided that when I was at
    lunch or there was free time in class, I was
    going to make an effort try to strike up a
    conversation with the people sitting around me.
    The first time was the worst I was so nervous
    and filled with panic. I was afraid of refection,
    but I was determined to take the risk. I knew if
    I didnt, there was no chance of me making
    friends, and I would be alone and miserable. I
    approached a table of people I recognized from
    class. Hello, I said in a hesitant, nervous
    voice, are you okay if I sit here and eat with
    you? I waited for a response - my heart in my
    throat - not wanting to stand there for fear the
    response would destroy me. Then the magical words
    came back to me. Sure! Instead of them not
    accepting me and my not fitting in, I found they
    were happy to meet me, and their comfortable
    conversations to make me feel welcome. A couple
    of the girls who were in my classes continued to
    make me feel welcome by introducing me to the
    others in the classroom. I soon found I was as
    part of a new group of friends similar to my old
    ones. Because I had the courage and determination
    to take a chance and speak up, I now have many
    new good friends. This can stay

25
Explain how you kept your old friendships
  • Here, I would write how I was able to keep my
    friendships because I was determined and
    persistent.
  • I kept in touch by phone
  • We text each other all the time
  • We visited each other regularly
  • They met my new friends!
  • Because I was persistent, I was able to keep my
    old friends.

26
Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so.
  • Explain one way I did
  • Wow, I created a strong transition
  • and topic sentence

27
Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week.
  • Heres another way I did

28
Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
  • Let me add some details about the two of them

29
Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them.
  • What about my best friend? Ill tell you how
    she felt about my new friends.

30
Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them. At first, I was
    not sure how my best friend would feel about my
    meeting new friends, but was relieved when she
    expressed how happy she was that I took the
    chance and have quickly made new friends. Staying
    in touch soon became a habit we grew accustom to.
  • What about visiting each other? Did it stop
    there?

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Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them. At first, I was
    not sure how my best friend would feel about my
    meeting new friends, but was relieved when she
    expressed how happy she was that I took the
    chance and have quickly made new friends. Staying
    in touch soon became a habit we grew accustom to.
    However, my persistence did not stop there.
    Fortunately, my friends were a short distance
    away, so we made time for regular weekend visits.
  • Let me tell you how cool it was

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Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them. At first, I was
    not sure how my best friend would feel about my
    meeting new friends, but was relieved when she
    expressed how happy she was that I took the
    chance and have quickly made new friends. Staying
    in touch soon became a habit we grew accustom to.
    However, my persistence did not stop there.
    Fortunately, my friends were a short distance
    away, so we made time for regular weekend visits.
    It was like old times to have my old friends come
    visit, except it was really new times because I
    introduce them to my new ones.
  • Heres the result

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Add some meat to old friends
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them. At first, I was
    not sure how my best friend would feel about my
    meeting new friends, but was relieved when she
    expressed how happy she was that I took the
    chance and have quickly made new friends. Staying
    in touch soon became a habit we grew accustom to.
    However, my persistence did not stop there.
    Fortunately, my friends were a short distance
    away, so we made time for regular weekend visits.
    It was like old times to have my old friends come
    visit, except it was really new times because I
    introduce them to my new ones. It made me feel
    good to expand the friendships between my old and
    new friends.
  • I need to wrap up the paragraph

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Voilà!
  • In addition to making new friends, I found it to
    be quite challenging at first to keep a strong
    friendship with my old friends. Nevertheless, I
    was determined to keep these friends because they
    were a special part of my life, and I found ways
    to do so. One such way was by telephone. It was
    difficult, but we made the effort to talk once a
    week. We found texting to be easier on a daily
    basis, and had many rich conversations this way.
    While I found texting easier, it was nice to
    actually hear my friends voices it kept me more
    emotionally connected to them. At first, I was
    not sure how my best friend would feel about my
    meeting new friends, but was relieved when she
    expressed how happy she was that I took the
    chance and have quickly made new friends. Staying
    in touch soon became a habit we grew accustom to.
    However, my persistence did not stop there.
    Fortunately, my friends were a short distance
    away, so we made time for regular weekend visits.
    It was like old times to have my old friends come
    visit, except it was really new times because I
    introduce them to my new ones. It made me feel
    good to expand the friendships between my old and
    new friends. Because of my determination and
    persistence, I was able to keep my close ties
    with my old friends, make new ones, and connect
    them both together.

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Now, add Jackie Robinson good place would be
background information before you overcame your
barrier. Here are some examples. You can use
these as your writing inspiration.
  • Jackie Robinson faced many obstacles when he
    agreed to cross the color barrier in baseball. I
    know he had to face similar obstacles when he
    moved to a new team however, he had the courage
    to take the first step to meet the new people he
    was going to play with as well as keep in touch
    with his friends and family. This gave me the
    strength to take a chance as well.
  • I learned about Jackie Robinson and the tough
    journey he took in order to break the color
    barrier in baseball. He is inspirational and
    instrumental in my moving in a forward direction
    and not letting obstacles get in my way of
    success. His inspiration is why I decided to take
    a chance.
  • I remember Jackie Robinson and the journey he
    went through to cross the colored barrier in
    baseball. He faced numerous drawbacks that tried
    to get in his way however, he refused to let
    them stop him from his taking a chance and
    reaching his goal. This inspired me to do the
    same.

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Wrap up your paragraph -- Remember, KISS (keep it
short and simple) Restate your barrier and wrap
up how you broke through it.
  • Moving and going to a new school was very
    frightening for me, and I found myself feeling
    self-doubt on my abilities to take that first
    step. However, by using courage, determination,
    and persistence, I was able to take the
    necessary steps to not only create new friends,
    but to also ensure I kept my old friendships
    strong.
  • I wrapped up how I restated my barrier in my
  • I accomplished my goal. first body paragraph.

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REFLECTION
  • This is where you go back and see where you can
  • Add better vocabulary (try not to use the same
    word twice unless necessary).
  • Make stronger sentences combine for compound,
    introductory phrases, dashes, or complex switch
    wording around to sound better.
  • Incorporated dialogue if at all possible, but
    dont make an entire conversation with it.
  • Check to make sure you kept on task and
    organized.
  • Be sure your spelling is correct (you have
    dictionaries!!!)

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Put it all together.
  • Who Hoo!
  • And you are done!!!!!
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