Writing Samples

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A paragraph is like a hamburger. Topic
Sentence Introduction Detail 1 Detail
2 Detail 3 Detail 4 Detail 5 Closing/Conclusion
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Big Mac Cheeseburger

• What are the ingredients of a Big Mac
  Cheeseburger?

Top Bun
Lettuce
Tomato Cheese
Onion Special Sauce Hamburger
Bottom Bun
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The topic sentence introduces the main idea of a
paragraph.

• Although most people believe that mans best
  friend is a dog, I think it should be a cat.
• Cats have been used as pets since the time of
  the pharaohs in Egypt. They have been found in
  countries all over the world. Obviously, cats
  have been the favorites of man for hundreds of
  years. I suppose cats are so well liked because
  they are gentle, friendly and easy to take care
  of.

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Whats missing?

• He collects books that were written over a
  hundred years ago. But he is also interested in
  the best sellers of today. If I ever need to get
  him a present, I know I can always please him by
  buying him a book.

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Whats missing?

• The most beautiful flower is the rose because
  it comes in so many different colors. Another
  beautiful flower is the daisy which sometimes
  grows wild. Spring flowers like tulips,
  daffodils, and crocuses are also very pretty.

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Writing Samples

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Extended Response

• Describe Free-dom. What do you think Toby,
  Sarah and the rest of the people find in
  Free-dom? Are they the first people to arrive?
  What does the land look like? Contrast
  Free-dom with life on the plantation. Use two
  examples from the selection.

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Example 1

• I think freedom is when you can decide things
  for yourself and be your own person. Toby,
  Sarah, and the rest of the people I think find
  freedom that now they get to make all these
  decisions for themselves and this new
  responsibility to take care of themselves. They
  must enjoy the freedom because there in theyre
  really free. I dont think theyre the first
  people to arrive because there have been slaves
  before them that have gotten free. Now all the
  slaves that have flown get to live on this
  wonderful piece of land. Theyre in Canada the
  safest place full of freedom and you have all
  these nice meadows and waterfalls that you can
  relax and admire all day. I think that when the
  freed slaves are in this place they can think
  freely and have a set of mind that they just
  wont get whipped or beat anymore. They life was
  horrible on the plantation where they would get
  yelled at and beat, now in Canada, with the
  beautiful surroundings all the people hardly ever
  think about life on the plantation.

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Example 2

• I think freedom is what you want it to be.
  It be heaven or a land that is your own. I think
  Toby, Sarah and all the rest of the people find
  out that freedom is heaven. No, they are not the
  first to arrive. If I was a slave, I would want
  to go to heaven besides work out in the sun my
  whole life. And the worst part is you dont get
  any self-satisfaction like today I made some
  money for my family and I worked hard. The slaves
  dont have a chance unless they want to be beaten
  to death. That is what freedom is, it is heaven.

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Example 3

• I think that Toby, Sarah and the rest of the
  people find a big bundle of happiness. They are
  overjoyed. The land must look strange since they
  were always on the plantation. Life on the
  plantation is boring and lifeless. It made them
  depressed since they had to work all the time.
  There were mistreated horribly like when they
  whipped Sarah and she had the baby.

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Example 4

• I think heroism is when someone does something
  to help someone else in a large way. Harriet
  Tubman showed examples of this by freeing 300
  slaves never losing a single one. She also
  provided her fugitives with food, clothing,
  shelter and will-power. She never was caught and
  never gave up. These are the ways I think harriet
  tubman shows heroism.

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Example 5

• To define the word heroism, is to define
  Harriet Tubman. Heroism means that you do things
  really great for other people even if you dont
  know them. That what Harriet Tubman did for the
  slaves in the South. Words that describe her are
  brave for risking her life every day to help
  people from slavery so they can treated equal.
  Courageous for not being afraid of anything,
  anyone or the consequences. Harriet Tubman was
  defietly a hero. The word heroism definetly fits
  the name Harriet Tubman.

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Example 6

• The folktale The People Could Fly is about
  a group of slaves who are imprisoned by the
  overseer. The slaves and their leader Toby, try
  to find Free-dom, but they have to do it by
  flying. I think Toby, Sarah, and they others
  find Free-dom to be a place where they dont
  have to listen to anyone, no slavery and no
  rules. I also think that they are not the first
  people to arrive to Free-dom because evryones
  experienced Free-dom before. I dont think
  that Free-dom is somewhere to go, I think
  Free-dom is something you experience with your
  friends and family. Life on the plantation was a
  hard grueling thing that the slaves endured. It
  was so bad that the overseer didnt even give
  them an identity. While Free-dom is a happy
  place where no one can control you. I think
  Free-dom is a heaven for the people that can
  fly.