Lim Por Yen Fil Theatre Double Bill

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Lim Por Yen Fil Theatre Double Bill

• 2004 UE Section C
• Proofreading

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Lim Por Yen Fil Theatre Double Bill

• What kind of films does the passage talk about?
• Have you ever seen such a film?
• Is it worthwhile to make such films?

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77. The Festival of Hungry Ghosts takes place
during78. the seven lunar month. At this time
the gates of hell are79. opened to free the
ghosts, then wander the world seeking food.

• The subject is Festival, not Ghosts.
• Correct.

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77. The Festival of Hungry Ghosts takes place
during78. the seven lunar month. At this time
the gates of hell are79. opened to free the
ghosts, then wander the world seeking food.

• The problem is with seven lunar month.
• Its not likely that a festival will last seven
  months. So
• During which month will it take place?
• Replace seven with seventh.

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77. The Festival of Hungry Ghosts takes place
during78. The seven lunar month. At this time
the gates of hell are79. opened to free the
ghosts, then wander the world seeking food.

• As its written, it sounds as if (the gates are
  opened) and then (the gates wander the world).
• A word is needed to make it clear that it is the
  ghosts who wander the world seeking food.
• Add who before then.

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80. In HK, many Taoist organisations hold up
ceremonies81. to honour for the dead and give
away rice to the elderly and the poor.

• You do not hold up a ceremony.
• You can hold up a bank, which means to rob a
  bank with a gun.
• You can hold up an object, which means to hold
  something up high.
• Delete up.

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80. In HK, many Taoist organisations hold up
ceremonies81. to honour for the dead and give
away rice to the elderly and the poor.

• If something is an honour for me, I feel
  honoured.
• The dead cannot feel honoured.
• The ceremonies are held to honour the dead.
• Replace for with to.
• N.B. give away give for free

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82. The rice distributed which is depicted in
this film was scheduled to83. last from 9am to
about 6pm but, in order to be sure a place in
the84. line, most people arrived well before
dawn.

• What was scheduled to last from 9am to 6pm?
• It was the act of giving the rice, not the rice
  itself.
• Distributed must be changed into a noun.
• Replace distributed with distribution.

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82. The rice distributed which is depicted in
this film was scheduled to83. last from 9am to
about 6pm but, in order to be sure a place in
the84. line, most people arrived well before
dawn.

• A preposition must follow sure.
• Add of after sure.

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82. The rice distributed which is depicted in
this film was scheduled to83. last from 9am to
about 6pm but, in order to be sure a place in
the84. line, most people arrived well before
dawn.

• Correct.

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85. Ngau Tau Kok Estate is one of oldest and
largest86. public housing projects in HK. Much
of the residents87. are either elderly people
who live alone or working-class families.

• An article is needed before adjectives ending in
  the suffix est.
• Add the before oldest.

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85. Ngau Tau Kok Estate is one of oldest and
largest86. public housing projects in HK. Much
of the residents87. are either elderly people
who live alone or working-class families.

• Residents is countable.
• Replace Much with Many or Most.

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85. Ngau Tau Kok Estate is one of oldest and
largest86. public housing projects in HK. Much
of the residents87. are either elderly people
who live alone or working-class families.

• They are still residents and they still live
  alone so the tenses are correct.
• Correct.

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88. Since 2001, when the government it formally
announced89. a detailed plan for redevelop the
surrounding area,90. residents gradually been
relocated to new housing estates.

• government and it are the same thing.
• Delete it.

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88. Since 2001, when the government it formally
announced89. a detailed plan for redevelop the
surrounding area,90. residents gradually been
relocated to new housing estates.

• What do they plan to do?
• Replace for with to.

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88. Since 2001, when the government it formally
announced89. a detailed plan for redevelop the
surrounding area,90. residents gradually been
relocated to new housing estates.

• Passive voice is appropriate.
• What tense is used with since.
• What is the passive form of the present perfect?
• Add have after residents.

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91. Following two social workers who work to help
the residents92. as they deal the difficulties
of relocation, this revealing93. documentary
film, shot over several months, offered its

• You work for your employer.
• Work to describes the reason you are working.
• Correct.

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91. Following two social workers who work to help
the residents92. as they deal the difficulties
of relocation, this revealing93. documentary
film, shot over several months, offered its

• What preposition usually follows deal?
• Add with after deal.

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91. Following two social workers who work to help
the residents92. as they deal the difficulties
of relocation, this revealing93. documentary
film, shot over several months, offered its

• The film was shot in the past.
• However, you can still watch it.
• Replace offered with offers.

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94. audience the glimpse into the lives of
impoverished 95. old people. The film presents
with a fascinating 96. group portrait showing of
our parents and grandparents.

• This is the first time this glimpse is mentioned.
• Offer a glimpse into is an expression.
• Replace the with a.

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94. audience the glimpse into the lives of
impoverished 95. old people. The film presents
with a fascinating 96. group portrait showing of
our parents and grandparents.

• You present something to someone.
• Ex. He presented the prize to the student.
• You present someone with something.
• Ex. He presented the student with a prize.
• Here, the film presents a group portrait of our
  parents to the audience.
• Delete with OR add us after presents.

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94. audience the glimpse into the lives of
impoverished 95. old people. The film presents
with a fascinating 96. group portrait showing of
our parents and grandparents.

• The film shows our parents and grandparents.
• We do not need a preposition after show.
• Delete of.