1 Language Network Elaboration 2 Elaboration Elaboration Elaboration is the addition of supporting details and explanations to develop a description, a narration, or an argument. 3 Elaboration Imagine that you would like to get a dog. 4 Elaboration Here are two ads you might see in the local paper. Which ad is better? Why? DOGS FOR SALE Dog for sale. 150. Lucky Call 555-8652 FUN-LOVING Golden/Yellow Lab named Spot loves cats and children, plays catch. Spot is 1 1/2 years old, weighs 55 pounds, and is in good health. Shots current. 150.Call 555-3223. 5 Elaboration Types of Elaboration DOGS FOR SALE Dog for sale. 150 Lucky Call 555-8652 Facts and Statistics FUN-LOVING Golden/Yellow Lab named Spot loves cats and children, plays catch. Spot is 1 1/2 years old, weighs 55 pounds, and is in good health. Shots current. 150.Call 555-3223. Descriptive Details 6 Elaboration As you write and revise, remember to elaborate. Consider using... 7 Elaboration Sensory Details Facts and Statistics Incidents or Anecdotes Specific Examples Quotations Visuals 8 Sensory Details Sensory details are bits of information you can collect through your five senses. Use details to enrich your descriptive and narrative writing. 9 Sensory Details The black stove, stoked with coal and firewood, glows like a lighted pumpkin. Eggbeaters whirl, spoons spin round in bowls of butter and sugar, vanilla sweetens the air, ginger spices it melting nose-tingling odors saturate the kitchen. . . . Truman Capote, A Christmas Memory 10 Facts and Statistics Facts are statements that can be proved, and statistics are facts expressed as numbers. Use facts and statistics to support your opinions, arguments, and ideas. 11 Facts and Statistics The Panama Canal is among the greatest engineering feats in the world. Begun in 1904, it took ten years to build. By 1913 more than 43,400 workers were employed on the canal. They had to drain swamps and cut through jungles. In all, 5,600 workers died from accidents or disease. 12 Incidents or Anecdotes Incidents or anecdotes are brief accounts of single events. Use them to round out your descriptions of people or events. 13 Incidents or Anecdotes Show business tradition holds that whatever happens, the show must go on. . . . Once flutist James Galway was performing in an outdoor concert at Ravinia, just north of Chicago. At one point in the show, when Galway opened his mouth to take a breath, a large bug flew into it. For a moment, he stopped playing and considered what he might do. Then realizing the show must go on, he took a great gulp and continued with his playing. Bob Sheperd, The Show Must Go On 14 Specific Examples Use specific examples to illustrate general statements or to show the characteristics of a group. 15 Specific Examples The insurance industry has been burned recently by earthquakes, hurricanes, and tornadoes. Floridas Hurricane Andrew alone bankrupted nine insurance companies. John F. Ross, Risk Where Do Real Dangers Lie? 16 Quotations Direct quotations are records of peoples exact words. Use quotations to illustrate ideas or to lend authority to your opinions. 17 Quotations The author Ambrose Bierce knew how to put people in their place. In his humorous dictionary, he defined edible as good to eat and wholesome to digest, as a worm to a toad, and a toad to a snake, a snake to a pig, a pig to a man, and a man to a worm. 18 Visuals Use charts, graphs, and other visuals to present complex information more simply. 19 Visuals Gestation Periods for Mammals 20 Practice and Apply Use an example to elaborate the following sentence. 21 Practice and Apply Provide facts or statistics to support the following statement. To see statistics you can use, click here. 22 Practice and Apply Source The World Almanac, 1999 Use back button to return to Practice. 23 Practice and Apply Add an incident to the following story idea. 24 Practice and Apply Add sensory details to the following statement. 25 Practice and Apply Use a quotation to support the following essay topic.