Recognize and Fix Sentencelevel Errors

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Recognize and Fix Sentence-level Errors

• Wednesday, Feb 7 2007

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Agenda for today

• Recognize and fix sentence-level errors in your
  writing
• Vocabulary exchange activity
• Journal responding activity

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Recognize and fix sentence-level errors

• A run-on/comma splice sentence
• A fragment sentence

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A run-on/comma splice sentence

• A run-on sentence
• We take English 101C we want to improve our
  English writing.
• A comma splice sentence
• We take English 101C, we want to improve our
  English writing.

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How do I fix a run-on/comma splice sentence?

• We take English 101C. We want to improve our
  English writing.
• We take English 101C we want to improve our
  English writing.
• We take English 101C because we want to improve
  our English writing.

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A fragment sentence

• We take English 101C because want to improve our
  English writing.
• We take English 101C. To improve our English.

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How do I fix a fragment sentence?

• We take English 101C because we want to improve
  our English writing.
• We take English 101C to improve our English.

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• Sentences from your writing

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• The sun is beginning to hide behind mountains,
  the sky is growing darker, birds are flying back
  to their own sweet nests and you just have
  finished your dinner in Ames.

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A comma splice sentence

• The sun is beginning to hide behind mountains,
  the sky is growing darker, birds are flying back
  to their own sweet nests and you just have
  finished your dinner in Ames.

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Correction

• The sun is beginning to hide behind mountains
  the sky is growing darker birds are flying back
  to their own sweet nests and you just have
  finished your dinner in Ames.

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Correction

• The sun begins to hide behind mountains, and the
  sky is growing darker. Meanwhile, birds are
  flying back to their own sweet nests and you just
  have finished your dinner in Ames.

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• After that, they will sit at a round table and
  have a dinner makes this Chinese New Year much
  more meaningful and warmer.

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A run-on and fragment sentence

• After that, they will sit at a round table and
  have a dinner makes this Chinese New Year much
  more meaningful and warmer.

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Correction

• After that, they will sit at a round table and
  have a dinner. This makes this Chinese New Year
  much more meaningful and warmer.

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• Second, the gate in the brids parents house is
  decorated with Tarub which is the decoration that
  is made from plants. For example, bananas tree,
  the banana fruit, coconut, sugar cane and
  banyans leaves

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A fragment sentence

• Second, the gate in the brides parents house is
  decorated with Tarub which is the decoration that
  is made from plants. For example, bananas tree,
  the banana fruit, coconut, sugar cane and
  banyans leaves

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A fragment sentence

• Second, the gate in the brides parents house is
  decorated with Tarub which is the decoration that
  is made from plants, such as bananas tree, the
  banana fruit, coconut, sugar cane and banyans
  leaves

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Correction

• Second, the gate in the brides parents house is
  decorated with Tarub which is the decoration that
  is made from plants. The plants that can be used
  to make Tarub include bananas tree, the banana
  fruit, coconut, sugar cane and banyans leaves

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• Order a cup of tea, and play porkers (pokers) or
  MaJiang with friends, or just sit and enjoy the
  sunshine, chat with most close friends, this is
  the most definitely tea culture.

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A fragment and run-on sentence

• Order a cup of tea, and play porkers (pokers) or
  MaJiang with their friends, or just sit and enjoy
  the sunshine, chat with most close friends, this
  is the genuine tea culture.

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Correction

• People usually order a cup of tea and then start
  to play porkers (pokers) or MaJiang with their
  friends. Sometimes, they just sit and enjoy the
  sunshine, chatting with most close friends. This
  is the genuine tea culture.

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Other errors in your writing

• Tense shift
• Unclear pronoun

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• But very quickly the King and Queen in the heaven
  knew this event and got very angry, because they
  think it was a criminal act

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Tense shift

• But very quickly the King and Queen in the heaven
  knew this event and got very angry, because they
  think it was a criminal act

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Correction

• But very quickly the King and Queen in the heaven
  knew this event and got very angry, because they
  thought it was a criminal act

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Unclear pronouns

• However, Korean houses have hangairs although the
  number of them is reduced. In a metropolis, they
  have two or three and in a country, there is a
  designated are called Jangdukdae for them.
  According to record, it was also used for other
  ways.

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Correction

• However, Korean houses have hangairs although the
  number of such houses is reduced. In a metropolis
  each Korean house has two or three hangairs. In
  contrast, in a country there is a designated are
  called Jangdukdae for them(?). According to
  record, hangairs were also used for other ways.

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Break a long sentence

• In fact, in order to avoid the sponsorship of a
  referendum or an initiative from large political
  parties and well-organized interests groups, and
  thus in order to avoid the failure of
  parliamentary plans or discontents with the
  status quo, the Swiss political system has, on
  one hand, progressively integrated the different
  large political parties into the government and,
  on the other hand, developed a phase of
  consultation with a large number of interests
  groups before making any political decision.

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Break a long sentence

• The Swiss political system has, on one hand,
  progressively integrated the different large
  political parties into the government and, on the
  other hand, developed a phase of consultation
  with a large number of interests groups before
  making any political decision.
• In this way, it effectively avoids the
  sponsorship of a referendum or an initiative from
  large political parties and well-organized
  interests groups and at the same time avoids the
  failure of parliamentary plans or discontents
  with the status quo.

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Vocabulary Exchange Activity

• 10 minutes
• 3 groups
• 5 students in a group

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Homework

• Responding to a classmates journal (due Monday,
  Feb 12)
• Read The first four minutes (p. 341),
  Nonverbal communication(p. 344), and How to
  spot a liar (p. 349).

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Journal response assignment

• The length of your response 150-250 words
• Content Comments, questions, suggestions, and so
  on.
• Its interesting to know that
• But I dont agree with you
• In my opinion
• What do you mean by
• Im curious about
• It seems that we share some similar
  experience

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Journal response assignment

• Section 1
• Yousuf Gerui
• Adwan Xiaoyun
• Sung Hwa Jialin
• Jessica Luciano
• Hou, Yi Eun
• Yi, Shuai Estelle
• Yuen Chang, Amily, Pedro

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Journal response assignment

• Section 2
• Seung-Minn Dora
• Jee Hyun Tian, Jie
• Sang-yeon Senglong
• Sung Bo Aaron
• Itcho Tee
• Sung Eun (Irene) Yuhang (Ted)
• Yun Jong (John) Peng Hooi
• Insik - Enrique